Please don't start asking the artist to take this design. It is their choice whether to take it or not, it is not mine and I only had an idea of what they could do to improve their character. Please take note that I'm not in any way attacking the artists who created their characters as I just want to help them and Unertalefan2000 please do keep in mind that this is only a suggestion and that I'm not trying to hurt you in any way. Thank you
This a character redesign suggestion for
's CreepyPasta OC Karen ^^
I will admit I do kind of like the design you were going for, I think some of the colouring goes well together! However I do think you should make a few changes, while the bleeding eyes are interesting and I see you were trying to go for a Sonic.Exe type trope but to be honest I kind of find that particular aspect to be overused quite a lot in the Fandom (no offence or anything
) and I would also recommend that you credit the Original Base Maker otherwise you're gonna have quite a lot of users come after you because you refuse to credit the Base Maker and insist you made them yourself or used them as reference. But I don't see that being a possibility at all if the artwork is copied line from line
E.g I blended both your image and the original base image together and as you can see your image perfectly match the original. I would give you more examples from frankly I'm kind of tired right now XDsta.sh/01bctexxeybe
With her bio I think it also needs a bit more work as we are limited on her backstory, personality and other necessary info to the bio. Some of the bio doesn't really make any sense either for example her species is Human/Hedgehog but I don't really see any human like qualities or features to her. She just looks like a regular Sonic OC. While I don't really mind you shipping your character with Jeff the Killer, you can ship her with whoever you like but be mindful that OCs being shipped with Jeff the Killer has been waaaay overdone too many times to count and the backstory doesn't even explain why they fell in love or how they met. But in my opinon I don't think he would be interested in being in a relationship considering he's a literal psychopath and does't care who he kills men, women, children, elderly. He just doesn't care as long as he enjoys inflicting pain upon others, so I have doubt he would actually fall in love with someone. I also recommend not ending her name with 'The Killer' as it is very cliched, unoriginal and again has been overused.
If you would like some help in expanding on your bio a bit more I'd suggestion going here ^^creepypasta-misery.deviantart.…komradapex.deviantart.com/art/…
Now onto the redesign itself! 8D
I pretty much really kept the original design however I decided to make a few adjustments. I kept you're characters colouring the same but instead of making her hair completely hot pink I decided to keep it black and have it fade into the hot pink colour. I decided to get rid of her bleeding black and red eyes and gave her regular ones but still kept her eyes red so it stood out from the black. I kept the clothes colours the same but I decided to give her shorts
and one of those shoulder cut shirts. So I pretty much made her a regular Sonic OC ^^ HOWEVER.
To keep her Creepypasta and Sonic.Exe vibe I made this! 8D
I really liked the whole some crazy Ol' scientist kipnapping and holding her captive in one of his cells and doing 'tests' on her, enough so to turn her into a literal monster! I can see like during her transformation it's a very slow and painful process as her bones are literally growing and cracking everyday to abnormal height and every time she grows so does her appetite. Her captor would try to keep her hunger at bay by feeding her dead animals but it soon came to a point were she preferred the animals alive. However eventually her hunger became so great she even started eating herself and one day she repeatedly rammed herself against the cell door until it completely broke, not only did she desire flesh but also revenge. So long story short she pretty much devoured her captive and completely succumbed to her hunger. (I'm sorry if this is a bad backstory I've never done a Creepypasta before XD)
For her monster form I made her really freakin' tall and lean, and gave her needle like legs and scyth like arms. Not only that but she's only night active and despises the sunlight as it hurts her eyes and she's partially blind in both of them so she mostly relies on her other senses such as hearing, smell and feeling the vibrations through her appendages, this can help her whoever she's stalking her prey. She's can be surprisingly sneaky and can easily hide just about anywhere however there is a chance you'll be able to hear her needle legs and arms clicking on the ground and her bones cracking and whenever she moves I see her moving like a spider.